10-10-2011, 07:04 PM
[quote name='Pinhole' timestamp='1318253997' post='12262']
Hi Ian,
In my opinion the 'problem' (if it can be called that) with your series is the composition. I would put aside all light/colour considerations for a moment and look carefully at each image: try to discover the 'subject' or focus point of each image, where the lines take your eye, and where the horizon 'feels right' (most of them feel 'squeezed' vertically, rather than achieving the (quite difficult) intensity of a narrow band of sky).
In most of the images (again just my view), there are a lot of nice contrasts, but actually nothing really interesting to hold the viewer's gaze (though I would consider re-framing no. 2 to see if it works - somehow the person in the image gives it an added dimension). Some technical tweaks might give the images more 'pop', but I don't think they will solve the underlying issue of composition.
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Hi Pinhole,
Thanks for this feedback, much appreciated.
Can I ask you for a bit more advice?
As you say, many of the compositions look 'squeezed' vertically - the result of me cropping out the sun which I'd included in the original pictures.
Here's No.2 with the horizon angle corrected, and including the sun.
Where would you crop this? Do you think it works with the sun included, or better to crop it out?
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Thanks again...
Time for a weekend Landscape Photography workshop, I think...! <img src='http://forum.photozone.de/public/style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/smile.gif' class='bbc_emoticon' alt='
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Ian
Hi Ian,
In my opinion the 'problem' (if it can be called that) with your series is the composition. I would put aside all light/colour considerations for a moment and look carefully at each image: try to discover the 'subject' or focus point of each image, where the lines take your eye, and where the horizon 'feels right' (most of them feel 'squeezed' vertically, rather than achieving the (quite difficult) intensity of a narrow band of sky).
In most of the images (again just my view), there are a lot of nice contrasts, but actually nothing really interesting to hold the viewer's gaze (though I would consider re-framing no. 2 to see if it works - somehow the person in the image gives it an added dimension). Some technical tweaks might give the images more 'pop', but I don't think they will solve the underlying issue of composition.
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Hi Pinhole,
Thanks for this feedback, much appreciated.
Can I ask you for a bit more advice?
As you say, many of the compositions look 'squeezed' vertically - the result of me cropping out the sun which I'd included in the original pictures.
Here's No.2 with the horizon angle corrected, and including the sun.
Where would you crop this? Do you think it works with the sun included, or better to crop it out?
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Thanks again...
Time for a weekend Landscape Photography workshop, I think...! <img src='http://forum.photozone.de/public/style_emoticons/<#EMO_DIR#>/smile.gif' class='bbc_emoticon' alt='
' />Ian